منتديات لغاتى التعليمية - ارجو منكم التعليق على الترجمه

السلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته
ارجو التعليق على هذه الترجمه وابداء الاراء حتى نستفيد جميعا

ظَمِئْت الَي نُوْر الْنَّبِي مُحَمَّد ... وَنَجوّي حَبِيْب مِنْه قَلْبِي قَد هُدِي

وَقَد هَزَّنِي وَحْي الْهِيّام بِهَدْيِه... فَقُلْت أَيَا قِيْثَارَة الْشِعَر غَرِّدِي

حَمَام الْحَمِي غَرَّد نَشِيْد تَوَلَهِي ... بِذِكْرِي حَبِيْب الْرَّوْح فِي كُل مُوَلِّد

أَهِيْم بِذِكْرِي سَاكِن الْبَيْت وَالْصَّفَا ... وَزَمْزَم ذَات الْمَنْهَل الْمُتَجَدِّد

أُرِيْد بِهَا طَهِّرَا وَأَن أَرْوِي الْصَّدِي .. فَأَنَّي صُدَي الْرُّوْح وَالْقَلْب وَالْيَد

صُدَي الْظَّمَا الْرُّوْحِي مِن شِدَّه الْجَوِّي .. وَهَمْس الْهَوَي الْقَلْبِي مِن مُتَوَحِّد

خَلَعْت ثِيَابا ضِقْت ذَرْعَا بِلُبْسِهَا .. وَرَمَت لَو أَنِّي فِي الْتَّقِي كَان مَشْهَدِي

لَبِسَت رِدَاء الْطُهْر ثُم إِزَارَه .. وَطُفْت حِيَال الْبَيْت أَبْغِي تُزَوِّدِي

وَمَالِي أُرِي نَفْسِي تُحَوِّم مَع الْهَوَي .. وَأَتْرُكُهَا تَهْوِي لِقَاع وَمُلْحِد

فَقُلْت لَهَا يَانَفْس صَوْمِي .. عَن الْخَنَا .. بِغَيْر الَّذِي يُلْهِيْك عَن حُب أَحْمَد
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I am fond of the halo of the Prophet Muhammad ..I want to whisper to him that he is the guidance of my heart
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Attracting by what he is saying ..I start writing my poem
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O`Mecca`s pigeons please sing a song that telling him about my great eagerness to him at every occasion of his holy birth day
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I am fond of the one who once was a resident of Mecca..fond of Kaaba,Safa, and the renewed water of Zamzam
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I want to purify my self from sins ,and to vanish every bad deeds I had ever did..I want to supersaturate my self with supplication
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I removed my normal clothes, which I was tired of it..I got into my purification clothe which is waist-cloth,and started my circumambulation around Kaaba with an honest repentance
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I was wondering ,how can I let the evil part of my self led me to the perdition without scolding her
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So,I ordered my self to stop making offenses,and to be pious by following the tenets of the prophet